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Faces following the sound
Of dancing friesians on the lane
Thund'ring claps within the ground
Seem to heave the earth in pain

Rivers forming rosy paths
On each ghostly blanch'ed cheek
Now and then to wetted halves
Letting loose a stifled shriek

Four by six by six in feet
Down to hell it doth inter
Down amid the devil's seat
Though the soil doth not stir

Every shadow of that cor'se
Swallowed into cank'rous Death
Summon now a greater force
To herald new and glorious breathe

But the kin'ed of the Right
Harb'ring now a hope to save
Deadly, twisting in thy sight
Blackened lillies 'pon a grave
©2004-2009 ~TheLaughingSun
:iconthelaughingsun:

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this is a copy of the poem I sent in to Poetry.com. It's not as long as the other two dark ones, but of them it is my favorite. It's funnny that this one got accepted into Impressions while A New Icarisy did not, since the allusion to Death is blatantly obvious here. O well, I don't make the rules. Though it'd be fun if I did....

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:iconlittlepoet321:
Yea, this is one of my favorites of your collection. I know what you mean about having your Impressions submissions pulled. It happened to three i think of mine. Even the mention of death in mine...pulled. and the other two might be pulled as well. Sucks. Then there will be no balance. Because currently i think i have two happy and two depressing ones in it. I think.... so then there will be too much happy.

Anyhow, I really like this poem. My favorite part is

"Four by six by six in feet
Down to hell it doth inter
Down amid the devil's seat
Though the soil doth not stir"
:iconpokebadgersoften:
i've been looking at your poems i think this is my favorite one so far (hence the :+fav: lol). your poems are really amazing ^_^ my favorite part of this one is:
"Rivers forming rosy paths
On each ghostly blanch'ed cheek
Now and then to wetted halves
Letting loose a stifled shriek"
there's something i really like about blood-like imagery..but anyway i really really like your style it is amazing ^_^.

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"Every event in the world can be broken down into one of two types: those in which it is appropriate to go dressed in a viking costume, and those in which it is not." -Matt Taibbi

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